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The Sad End of this Hope - Posted on 2010-11-23 03:06:20

PorkMoth
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As the rice grew early
and the maid looked surly
My father lay wishes
at the foot of the ditches

Hate filled his mind
As he took to the skies
with germans to bomb
and fruits grew aplomb

the final announcement
laid daisies to rind
As he slipped to his death
In the fields of his mind

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	The Sad End of this Hope - Posted on 2010-11-23 05:25:46
the_ox 1300cc Superstar Joined: Saturday, October 30, 2004 Posts: 8803 Location: London United Kingdom	Hey, I actually like that one. Your getting better!!!! Just tossed some thoughts ( well it is early and the drugs aint kicked in yet ( medicinal ones)) about and thought of a trip to Glastonbury I partook of with some old friends who have since passed off this mortal coil. Actually trying to add finishing touches, listening to Pink Floyd. Try reading this with "Final Cut" in mind. 2nd verse onwards Well here it is. Hope it comes across as I feel. A dawn arose....................... A dawn arose, so damp and crisp sneaked upon us, some friends missed Passions cooling, bodies spent Howling urges gone went We awoke startled, minds wary farmers crying, time for dairy Did it happen, were we there Stonehenge - Glastonbury fair People shouting eat my shorts Blame MTV for the retorts Bands playing on our wrists Eternity ones not to be missed Ankle bracelets on spotty chavs Selling anything, money for grabs Did we do it, was we there Glastonbury, did we care We jumped the fence yes we did Do we regret it not a bit To old friends so dear , Which bit did we not hear We loved the game did we not Lived it large never forgot A new dawn arose................................... -- I like long walks,especially when they are taken by people who annoy me.

	The Sad End of this Hope - Posted on 2010-11-25 16:13:25
the_ox 1300cc Superstar Joined: Saturday, October 30, 2004 Posts: 8803 Location: London United Kingdom	At least someone say my effort was either crap or good.................pls -- I like long walks,especially when they are taken by people who annoy me.

	The Sad End of this Hope - Posted on 2010-11-25 19:52:31
Martin 1300cc Superstar Joined: Saturday, November 27, 2004 Posts: 3628 Location: Kent United Kingdom	you look like ... -- Martin ☺

	The Sad End of this Hope - Posted on 2010-11-25 19:53:54
Martin 1300cc Superstar Joined: Saturday, November 27, 2004 Posts: 3628 Location: Kent United Kingdom	< pats ox on the back reasuringly > if it was crap you wouldnt have put it on here! lol seriously tho its cool ... keep it up huh -- Martin ☺

	The Sad End of this Hope - Posted on 2010-11-25 20:28:01
the_ox 1300cc Superstar Joined: Saturday, October 30, 2004 Posts: 8803 Location: London United Kingdom	I know seeking comments either good or bad is a nasty selfish issue. To be honest that was done in a hour of soul searching to keep it short and concise. Also the new painkillers were doing my head in!!! My apologies for demanding a comment on the subject. If it was as good as I thought they would have been forthcoming anyway. -- I like long walks,especially when they are taken by people who annoy me.

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